12/19/2010

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The cattails’ broken blades are white with rime. Two juncos flutter up under the springhouse eaves, investigating the empty phoebe nest.

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  1. White with rime,
    the cattails’ broken blades–

    Under the springhouse eaves,
    an empty phoebe nest–

    Two juncos come
    fluttering with flags–

    As if to let us know the world
    has not forsaken us completely–

    Luisa A. Igloria
    12 19 2010


    1. I’m having trouble understandng what you mean by “flags” here — I’m getting a cartoonish image, which I’m not sure is what you intended.


  2. Dave: this is more what I meant.

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    White with rime,
    the cattails’ broken blades–

    Under the springhouse eaves,
    an empty phoebe nest–

    Two juncos come, wings
    fluttering like prayer flags–

    As if to let us know the world
    has not forsaken us completely–

    Luisa A. Igloria
    12 19 2010


    1. Ah, o.k. That works! I’ll add this to the queue at Via Neg.


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